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[其他] robertzai老师帮助改作文专贴【师傅外出,暂停】

本主题由 benz2015 于 2008-8-5 15:13 关闭

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很不错哦 加油
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22楼的朋友

加油!!!
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23楼的朋友,加油!!
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27楼的朋友 加油!!!
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回复 45# robertzai 的帖子

非常感谢肉老师!
我一直觉得自己的句子很awkward...
其实也不是为了去写长句,是为了多写一些,充字数....看来是不明智的

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回复 46# tostudyinusa 的帖子

是啊 不要刻意就好了 长短句结合呀
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29楼的朋友:非常非常佩服
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肉老师真是辛苦了,致敬!

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34楼的朋友加油!
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35楼的朋友 非常出色哦!!
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回复 51# robertzai 的帖子

谢谢肉老师修改!
那个intrinsic是OG听力里面学的词,blemish也是在某个材料中看到的
这次写的比较顺是因为例子很快就想好了

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提个建议 把标题 内容 写上

这样也有利于后来人阅读 观看原文和评价

本身也是个学习的过程 不是么 在每篇之后稍微写下 就好了

肉老师辛苦了 看到你的好多作文修改帖的

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写了一篇,麻烦肉老师帮忙改一下吧,谢谢了~~
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一束永未来的花
一堆漂亮的假话
天天见面
别人失恋再相恋
苦辣甜酸
我仍然在等, 却不知道为什么在等

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麻烦老师帮忙改一下

向你学习
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"This is Maxwell Smart, Agent 86, calling control!"

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回复 53# .氕. 的帖子

谢谢提议

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向肉老师致敬.
谢绝调戏。~嘎嘎。~

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37楼的朋友加油!
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谢谢老师!继续努力~
我写的是蓝鹰题目
然后用了写作练习软件,自动生成的里面有加题目
嘿嘿

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我是菜鸟,多谢老师了

Nowadays,a great many university students share an experience of cutting classes.However,there is a disdinction between these students.On the one hand,some students develop a habit of playing truant,which results from their absence several times.consequently,they apear in class never.On the other hand,another group of these students hardly fail to be in class.They eascap class occasionally, only for the reason that there is something important for them to do while the class.

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TOPIC 20 It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reason and examples to develop your essay.

     Though a considerable of people hold the opinion that the environment of countryside is better than that of city for children to grow up, I think that the city environment benefits children for its quality-oriented education, better public infrastructure, and more opportunities for college.

First of all, students in the countryside have suffered a lot in the examination-oriented education system. Before graduating from high school, students in the countryside concentrate their time exclusively on how to get high scores in the examinations. Ironically, any activities except study will be regarded as disobedient or allegedly rebellious. Instead, in the quality-oriented education system, children in the city concern more about how to improve their comprehensive competence. They tend to consciously do activities which parents in the countryside may consider as ridiculous. For instance, my friend Lee, who grew up from Beijing, has being interested in Botany since preliminary school. As a student of liberal art, he joined a study group on the issue of flower-growing, which is totally unrelated to his school study. However, their group finally achieved a great honor in Botany Competition of The World.

      Additionally, facilities of health care, schools and some other infrastructures are of excellent quality in the cities. For instance, when children get sick, it is significant to take them to the hospital immediately, for some serious ill may lead to severe diseases like infantile paralysis. However, in the countryside, situations are totally different.

      And finally, there are more changes for children in the cities to get into well-known universities. City universities have large numbers of spaces reserved for local students while they have relatively fewer spaces for ones from the countryside. If I have children, I would raise them in a city.

       With respect to all the evidence mentioned above, it is not difficult to conclude that surrounding in the cities is better than that in the countryside for children to develop.

谢谢老师

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