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Nowadays, it is a common scene that classrooms in college or university are crowded with students, despite the expensive tuition fees. Why do hundreds of thousands of youths make their choices to enter into college or university rather than doing any else?
Try to answer this question ,I think there are three reasons as follows:直接提出你的main reason
Firstly, the desire for more knowledge to add a new dimension to their ability and personality may be the main concern. After
graduating from senior school, most people
only have learned some basic skills and elementary knowledge, obviously,
they are指代什么 too little to meet an aspiring person's need. To solve this problem, passing the college entrance examination and becoming a college student is a best bet. In campus, large amount of information is provided for students, there are also many established professors, excellent-designed experimental devices and various books which are collected in libraries. All above can give a good chance for whoever wanted to
improve himself to achieve his goal. prepare himself
Secondly, a job hunter with a college certificate can easier enhance his chance of getting a better post than who not. The consideration is of great significance to a college-entry decision. In modern society ,a college
certificate usually means a proper evidence which can prove the
holder's ability
这样表达不地道., in addition, it is better to combine it with
true capability用genuine ability . Given the current situation, the competition between job hunters could be more and more drastic. In order to make a breakthrough in this plight, many people turn to
seek a college certificate. seek用再这里不好
Thirdly, the stress from family may be another reason. Parents who are not so rich hope their children can change the whole family's situation, so they save money to pay the high college expenses,
encouraging their children to study hard. Most people believe that learning
is college can improve one's reasoning, analysis and judgment, and that's necessary for a
successful man 可以说being successful. As to rich family, the parents' will to make their children's future bright also strong, so they take the same action to send their boys and girls to college.
All in all, it is the fact that college or university are enrolling a great number of students. We should concentrate our focus on the diverse reasons behind this phenomenon, in order to find out the correct policy to encounter it.
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重点问题,句式单一,词汇不丰富,语法错误.
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