8．Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television hasdestroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasonsand examples to support your opinion.



It is no doubt that TV has great influent with human being. In some people’s opinion TV destroyed the relationship,because it takes the time of communication. But to be honest, I can not agree with the opinion.

First, TV provides more subject to friends to talk about. Before the TV invented, friends only have subject about reallife, like what are you eating today, how about yesterday football match. But after the TV invented, it provides more subjects. Some of them are not happen in the real world, like fictional story. So, friends could talk more, which means communication increased. When I was young, I do not “like” watching TV since in China student’s education is very strict and thus there are so many homework to do. For this reason, I have few friends, because I do not know how to talk with others, therefore I had not enough confidence to communicate with people. But when I was a high school student, this situation has improved, because I could spend some time on TV. Since then, I had desire to talk with others about TV programlast night. And luckily, there is many classmates have such an idea. So I make a lot of friends rapidly.

Second, TV provides more chance to family to communicate, especially between parents and kids. Parents before always feel hard to understand their kids. This problem called  “generation gap”. But TV provides some solutions. The cartoon, for example, both enjoyed by children and adults, give them a way to talk and to discuss.

In conclude. Although, TV may take the time for communication and some time have negative fluent about communicate between the families and the friends, it open another window. And compare the benefit and expense, it improve the communication totally. More over, it provides some solution to problems that can not be solved before.




写了两个观点是因为到30分钟了：（




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[ 本帖最后由 sunzxing 于 2006-12-31 11:53 编辑 ]

8．Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television hasdestroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasonsand examples to support your opinion.

It is no doubt that TV has great influent with用 influence on human being直接用people影响人们. In some people’s opinion TV destroyed the relationship应该说清楚是什么关系,because it takes the time of communication. But to be honest, I can not agree with the opinion.   写到这里的时候,你要大概的解释一下,让论点提出的有力度,而且,可以引出后面的论证.

First, TV provides more subject to friends to talk about. Before the TV invented, friends only have subject about reallife, like what are you eating today, how about yesterday football match. 中式英语而且太绝对,忽略了报纸的存在.        But after the TV invented, it provides more subjects如果前面一句是provide subjects这里就要换一个说法. Some of them are not happen in the real world, like fictional story. So, friends could talk more, which means communication increased. When I was young, I do not “like” watching TV since in China student’s education is very strict and thus there are so many homework to do. For this reason, I have few friends, because I do not know how to talk with others, therefore I had not enough confidence to communicate with people. But when I was a high school student, this situation has improved时态, because I could spend some time on TV. Since then, I had desire to talk with others about TV programlast night. And luckily, there is many classmates have such an idea. So I make a lot of friends rapidly.

Second, TV provides more chance to用 for family to communicate, especially 这里要说明是交流 between parents and kids. Parents before always feel hard to understand their kids. This problem called  “generation gap”. But TV provides some solutions. The cartoon, for example, both enjoyed by children and adults, give them a way to talk and to discuss.

In conclude. Although, TV may take the time for communication and some time have negative fluent about communicate between the families and the friends, it open another window. And compare the benefit and expense, it improve the communication totally. More over, it provides some solution to problems that can not be solved before.

建议你恶补语法.
继续努力.
You can be better.

好，第二篇改正的是没有实际的例子的问题
下一篇我要改进的是：
1。首段点明观点
2。不写太绝对的话


一共只有2周准备作文，还有13天。。。。替自己加油。。。。嗷~~~~~~~~~

另外，蓝鹰。我是初学者，问题肯定一大堆。能狠批一下么？把毛病说全面点？？？

lz我个人觉得你的文章把问题说的挺明白的,表达方面短期很难提高,还有时间就注意积累吧.
另外字数有点少,好歹要上350啊~
像In conclude这种错误出现了说明lz练的少 ,还有10多天建议lz多练练不同方面话题~还是要注意限时~
菜鸟意见~仅供参考~

再对Holsety的进行补充
1.关键句，比如firstly，in conclusion,之类的练好
2.有时间看看语法
3.对着题库理理提纲
You gonna be ok!