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T40:The expression"never,never give up"means to keeping trying and never stop working for your goals. Do you agree and disagree with this statement?

  

The pinnal of success stands on the three main pillars of judgement, industry and health. Industry seems to be quite a vital factor on the ardous but well-tried avennue to successs.That is to say , one should keep trying and never stop working for achieving ones goals. From my point of view, keeping trying and never stop working can open you the portal of temple of success. The reasons for my view goes as follows:

Firstly, success needs working constantly. The opponents of this point of view seems to be the devotees of godness of luck, they point out that someone borns lucky whereas others do not, and success goes to those on whom fortune smiles and defeat to those that she frowns. In my opinion, this doctrine is a poision to mind. Psycology studies shows that sucesss is much more easier to go to ones that believe in working constantly as well as desire to working and trying. That is to say, nothing but working and brains, of course, backed by health counts.  

Furthurmore, keeping trying and never stop working will build your confidence. In a other world, get through every difficulites can be an ardous experience. However, each time you win you gain the comfidence. For instance, you regard the stright A' to be one of your goals in the university. Doubtlessly,there comes numerous diffisulties to achieve it,working is needed:discussing your confusions with your team mates, asking professors your questions, each time you can be better. It is clear that not only did you have a deeper understanding on your subject, but your confidence have been built, since you are avidance than others and have get through what others do not.

Finally, keeping trying and never stop working promote you experiences.The more you working, the more experience you gain. In achieveing your goals, experiences sometimes can be a destribute. As long as you keep trying and never stop working, you get the experience involoves to your jobs or subjects, your human relations, and your means of handling the issues. In the long run, when your goals have been accomplished, you will find that" no trying, no gaining".

In conclusion, I agree that we should keeping working and nevet stop trying, for the advantages are obvious. Trying and working building your confidence, promoting your experience, even leading you to the central shrine of success.


改了一点点~

不知道这样说不说得过去~



[ 本帖最后由 ZOE.COOPER 于 2007-1-3 10:37 编辑 ]
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  • Holsety 威望 +1 鼓励发文~ btw,R U a girl? ^_^b 2007-1-3 15:19

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如果是写勤奋,那么是一片不错的文章
1.永不放弃,但是论证的第一段里面写的是勤奋,是两回事,写跑题了

2.中式表达存在The more you working, never stop working(题目中是never stop working for. 单独用就不行),之类的

但是连词用的很好.
论证的第一段重写吧

[ 本帖最后由 benz2015 于 2007-1-2 18:47 编辑 ]
I want you -- I want you to ask yourselves: Were you in this campaign just for me, or were you in it for that young Marine and others like him?

Were you in it for that mom struggling with cancer while raising her kids?

Were you in it for that young boy and his mom surviving on the minimum wage?

Were you in it for all the people in this country who feel invisible?


欢迎加入蓝鹰计划这一平凡而伟大的活动--助中国的IBT奋斗者一臂之力。

我们应该努力的学习,努力的奋斗,为了理想,历经千辛万苦,希望失望希望失望希望失望反反复复挣扎,依然不低下高贵的头,这样才能对世界说, My dream is what I get.
                                                               --Jimmy


分手不叫失去,她结婚了,而且还没有告诉你,才是真正的失去

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还好不是真的考试~
我第一段改改~
但是我就不明白了~
为什么THE MORE YOU WORKING就不行了呢?这跟中式吗?应该怎么说?
THANKS~

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原帖由 ZOE.COOPER 于 2007-1-2 18:22 发表

还好不是真的考试~
我第一段改改~
但是我就不明白了~
为什么THE MORE YOU WORKING就不行了呢?这跟中式吗?应该怎么说?
THANKS~
take it easy
THE MORE YOU WORKING是
你工作的越多这个意思吗
=>the harder you work
多劳多得more work, more pay
I want you -- I want you to ask yourselves: Were you in this campaign just for me, or were you in it for that young Marine and others like him?

Were you in it for that mom struggling with cancer while raising her kids?

Were you in it for that young boy and his mom surviving on the minimum wage?

Were you in it for all the people in this country who feel invisible?


欢迎加入蓝鹰计划这一平凡而伟大的活动--助中国的IBT奋斗者一臂之力。

我们应该努力的学习,努力的奋斗,为了理想,历经千辛万苦,希望失望希望失望希望失望反反复复挣扎,依然不低下高贵的头,这样才能对世界说, My dream is what I get.
                                                               --Jimmy


分手不叫失去,她结婚了,而且还没有告诉你,才是真正的失去

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恩~
我知道了~
我去改作文了~
THANKS`

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怎么都觉得还是有点怪怪的~

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原帖由 ZOE.COOPER 于 2007-1-3 10:40 发表
怎么都觉得还是有点怪怪的~
怎么了,说一下
I want you -- I want you to ask yourselves: Were you in this campaign just for me, or were you in it for that young Marine and others like him?

Were you in it for that mom struggling with cancer while raising her kids?

Were you in it for that young boy and his mom surviving on the minimum wage?

Were you in it for all the people in this country who feel invisible?


欢迎加入蓝鹰计划这一平凡而伟大的活动--助中国的IBT奋斗者一臂之力。

我们应该努力的学习,努力的奋斗,为了理想,历经千辛万苦,希望失望希望失望希望失望反反复复挣扎,依然不低下高贵的头,这样才能对世界说, My dream is what I get.
                                                               --Jimmy


分手不叫失去,她结婚了,而且还没有告诉你,才是真正的失去

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可能是一开始就写走题了~
现在改了该是觉得这文章(特别是第一段)比较适合写INDUSTRY~
但是从另一个角度讲好像又说得过去~
NEVER STOP TRYING AND WORKING FOR ACHIEVING YOUR GOALS不能也算是INDUSTRY的一种吗?

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原帖由 ZOE.COOPER 于 2007-1-3 11:36 发表
可能是一开始就写走题了~
现在改了该是觉得这文章(特别是第一段)比较适合写INDUSTRY~
但是从另一个角度讲好像又说得过去~
NEVER STOP TRYING AND WORKING FOR ACHIEVING YOUR GOALS不能也算是INDUSTRY的一种吗?
第一段比较适合写industry

勤奋和坚持不懈是又区别的
never, never give up,结合丘吉尔的经历,你可以知道,他是说不管希望看似多么渺茫,依然坚持!
而勤奋,是另外的意思,简单点就是比别人多付出一些心血
I want you -- I want you to ask yourselves: Were you in this campaign just for me, or were you in it for that young Marine and others like him?

Were you in it for that mom struggling with cancer while raising her kids?

Were you in it for that young boy and his mom surviving on the minimum wage?

Were you in it for all the people in this country who feel invisible?


欢迎加入蓝鹰计划这一平凡而伟大的活动--助中国的IBT奋斗者一臂之力。

我们应该努力的学习,努力的奋斗,为了理想,历经千辛万苦,希望失望希望失望希望失望反反复复挣扎,依然不低下高贵的头,这样才能对世界说, My dream is what I get.
                                                               --Jimmy


分手不叫失去,她结婚了,而且还没有告诉你,才是真正的失去

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原帖由 benz2015 于 2007-1-3 11:59 发表



第一段比较适合写industry

勤奋和坚持不懈是又区别的
never, never give up,结合丘吉尔的经历,你可以知道,他是说不管希望看似多么渺茫,依然坚持!
而勤奋,是另外的意思,简单点就是比别人多付 ...
恩~
我再想想~

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我觉得第一第二段有点在像在写the quality of the success man
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  • Holsety 威望 +1 谢谢点评 2007-1-3 20:03
让我的花瓣洒在你的回忆里...

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而且,我觉得,第二和第三个理由有包含关系...就觉得重复了
让我的花瓣洒在你的回忆里...

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嗨~~~~
总之就是一篇失败的文章就对了~
我去看看这篇T40的范文~
看看人家怎么写的~
我拿它实在是NO IDEA了~

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